Friday, 2 December 2011

Last lines Part 2

This is the second half of the last lines I edited during NaNoRevMo.

The details just said 'Professional Services' and totalled £15,000.

Sid waved the radio about.  "I'm going up to the edge to let the bomb squad know that we've found it, and what its layout is."

There was a knock on the door and a guard entered.  "Sorry to disturb you, but we've just got word that the plane with the girl on, has disappeared."

In his world of blinding light and agony, the darkness robbed him of his consciousness.

In his haste to get the job done, he'd forgotten he'd need a security card to give him acess to the other parts of the building.

His head turned sharply as an invisible punch landed on his jaw.  He sank to the floor, his eyes rolling up in their sockets.

"They are looking to ship us back home, but I've said that we all need a break, so I'll be driving us there.  It'll give us time to track down Maz's movements, and fix the mess that they've landed us in."

“Pleasant trip?”  The sarcastic voice gave T.D. a sinking feeling in the pit of his stomach.  Mr. Large was driving.

Steve appeared in the dooray, quickly followed by Sid and Holly.

They think that the plane was probably hit by lightning.

Who knew what menial tasks they would be set once they went back to London.


  1. Great lines. I think you are so brave to share. I know almost everyone did on the email chain, but I never did. I guess I have WSD too! (Writing Sharing Deficiency...hey, not as cool as CRAPPED, but whatever).

  2. Thanks Jessie. At first I wasn't sure about sharing, but when I looked at the lines out of context, I thought: What on earth is going on here? They seemed to be thought provoking, and I hoped it made whoever read them desperate to find out more.

  3. Your last lines are so much fun to read. I will continue to look for them as we continue our revisions group!

  4. I'm glad you like them Emily. It's fun imagining the reactions of everyone when they read them :o)

  5. I loved reading your last lines. Seeing them together is awesome!

  6. Thanks Peggy. I was quite pleased with some of them :o)